(Authors note: here's a script I wrote a while ago that I really want to have made into a proper comic at some point, probably a part of an anthology taking place in the Diamoverse of my canon of work, already have a name for this anthology, MULTI-TEAM COMICS, named after the primary superhero team in the Diamoverse, at some point I'll either have the drawing ability to do it myself, have the money to hire artist or do it as a collaborative project with my friends, or maybe even some mix of the 3, anyways, here's the script, hope you enjoy)
Pg1
Panel1: skinny rectangular panel at the top of the page.
Action: we see Atto running through a wall at a criminal.
Title: Atto the artificial man in, the creation of atto.
Panel2: somewhat large vertical rectangle panel right below the first panel on the left side of the page.
Action: we see a scientist sitting in a dark room with other figures that are masked in shadow.
Scientist: welcome gentleman, as you may or may not be aware I've been researching and developing a fantastic new technology that is set to change the world, but you probably don't know the specifics of my scientific work as I have specifically kept this information out of the papers.
Panel3: somewhat large vertical rectangle panel right below the first panel on the middle of the page.
Action: the scientist stands up and begins to walk to a curtain.
Scientist: you see my dear friends, years ago on an expedition to an ancient Temple in the far east, I found an anomalous and strange stone that exuded a power beyond a person's wildest imagination.
Panel4: somewhat large vertical rectangle panel right below the first panel on the right side of the page.
Action: the scientist is at the curtain and pulls at it slowly revealing the window behind it.
Scientist: I brought the stone back to the States, I began doing studies on it and realized, it was the perfect power source for a project that I had dreamed of since I was a young boy and learned of the made men of myth.
Panel5: large horizontal rectangular panel at the very bottom of the page taking up a good portion of it.
Action: we see the man has fully removed the curtain from the window and behind the window stands a man that is clearly not human with palish blue skin.
Scientist: behold my Adam, Atto the artificial man.
Pg2
Panel1: large rectangle panel at the top of the page.
Action: we see the man behind the glass as he looks around as the scientist stands in front of the glass.
Scientist: I made him to be more than just an ordinary man as well,
Panel2: small square panel under previous panel on left side
Scientist: just watch.
Action: the scientists press a button.
Panel3: small rectangular panel under previous panel taking up the middle and right of the page.
Action: a hatch opens on the side of the room, out of it rolling a table with a steel bar right in front of Atto.
Scientist: watch what my artificial man can do to a steel bar.
Panel4-6: small square panels going from left to right
Action: we see the artificial man as he picks up the bar and begins to bend it with ease into a pretzel.
Panel7: medium sized rectangular panel at the bottom .
Action: we see from the perspective of the crowd there silhouettes seen as they react emotively to what they see in the spotlight, that of course being the scientist and atto behind the glass.
Crowd: incredible, amazing, astonishing.
Scientist: yes but I intended for him to be that strong, now look at what I didn't intend.
Pg3
Panel1: small square panel of the scientist's face.
Scientist: Atto I want you to bring me a genuine Arctic penguin.
Panel2-4: two small square panels starting from the middle of the top right of the page going to the right of the page, then In the middle of the page a largish rectangular panel.
Action: Atto appears to disappear and then immediately reappears with a close up on him and his smiling doofy expression with a penguin squawking in his arms.
Crowd: impossible, how'd he do that, the thing can teleport.
Panel5: small square again with the scientist.
Scientist: not teleport my good man, but move at such incredible speeds that appears to rival even the likes of Mercury, now watch this, Atto, bring me the penguin.
Panel6-8 same pattern as before with two small square panels starting from the middle going to the right and ending on a large rectangular panel at the bottom of the page.
Action: atto begins to walk towards the glass as his body begins moving and vibrating into a blur of green and orange and smeared details The birds still in his hands with this final panel showing him from the front super close to the glass seemingly about to break through it.
crowd: oh my Lord, he's coming right toward us, he's a walking explosion.
Pg4
Panel1-4: 3 normal small square panels and then a final rectangular panel with the penguin.
Action: we see as almost by magic the artificial man walks straight through the glass and wall as if nothing was there at all not even breaking anything, then presenting the squawking penguin to his creator.
Crowd: how, impossible, he's a ghost.
Scientist: no gentleman I assure you he is not a ghost.
Panel5-6: medium sized rectangles.
Action: we see the scientist walking over and grabbing the penguin as he talks.
Scientist: But instead it appears that the ancient power source I had used on my mechanical man has allowed him to move not just his entire body at impossible speeds but move his very atomic structure In such a way that he could walk through walls.
Panel7: medium rectangle on the left side of the page.
Action: we see a close up of the scientist as he holds the penguin under his right arm.
Scientist: possibly even allowing him to physically change his form whether that be in appearance.
Panel8: medium rectangle on the right side of the page.
Action: we now are looking at the audience with one shadey member of the crowd perking up at the mention of the precious metal.
Scientist: such as stretching his limbs or even potentially reconstructing his very atoms into that of lead or gold.
Panel9: a rectangle taking up the rest of the page.
Action: we see from the crowd again as they look at the spotlight but this time they are all giddy and clapping.
Crowd: truly awe inspiring, I still can't believe it and it's standing in front of me, doctor doctor, what do you plan on doing with your man-made man.
Panel10: small square panels in the right corner of the page covering some of the 9th panel.
Action: we see a close up on the scientist's head.
Scientist: well.
Pg5
Panel1-7: the upper left corner panel is a circle with the scientist's head but the rest are rectangular in a grid pattern, with the majority being vertical and rectangular with the final large panel being horizontal.
Action: panel 1 with scientists's head.
Scientist: with the recent uptick in crime, the looming horseman of war.
Action: panel 2 we see a skeleton in a cape, hat and Domino mask with whited out eyes looking head on at the camera.
Scientist: and the recent rise of the mystery man and super powered vigilante.
Action: panel 3 we see the scientist face again but from a different angle, clearly he's serious.
Scientist: I feel it is my duty to make sure that my mechanical creation.
Action panel 4 and another shot of the scientist this time looking at the reader.
Scientist: nigh my mechanical son be a symbol of heroic values and protect those who cannot protect themselves.
Action: panel 5 we see a side view of a line up of various different shadowed out heroes including a guy who looks like a blue version of the flame, a woman in a spandex suit with a clear blindfold on and the previously mentioned skeleton guy in front.
Scientist: so I have decided to allow Atto to join the ever growing ranks of super americans fighting the good fight and protecting the freedoms of our great countries people.
Action: panel 6 we see over atto's shoulder as the doctor reads to him from a book of American history.
Scientist: and I have taught my mechanical son those great American values and have trained him to use his powers to the best of my ability.
Action: penel 7 we see the scientist again as he stands center in the spotlight, a full view from the front as atto stands to the side, his upper half being unilluminated by the spotlight.
Scientist: and he will begin his fight against corruption and villainy soon, very soon.
Pg6
Panel1: a medium sized rectangular panel taking up the upper left and upper middle of the page.
Caption: more than a few moments after the conference concludes our good doctor and his mechanical man are met by an unwanted surprise.
Action: we see the old doctor being accompanied by his robot as he is walking but a knock is heard.
Panel2: square taking up the right corner of the page.
Action: we see a close up on the scientist with Atto in the background looking back at the scientist, the scientist on the left side, atto on the right.
Scientist: Atto, I'll go grab the door and see who's there, probably another reporter who missed the conference wanting a private scoop, can you prepare me my tea.
Atto: right away pops.
Panel3-5: two medium sized squares on either side of the page and a big rectangle at the bottom, so big that the third and fourth panel are over the 5th.
Action: We see the scientist crack open the door with a close up on his face in the first two panels with the first panel showing an expression of annoyance and the next one of horror with the final panel showing him being pushed backwards as a group of mobsters barge their way in.
Scientist: I told several of you already there is no private scoop, you're too late.
Mobster: we are never late doc.
Pg7
Panel1: square in the upper left hand corner.
Action: one mobster pistol whips the doctor to the floor.
Panel2: a rectangle taking up the right and middle of the top of the page.
Action: We see the mobster towering over the frail old scientist.
Mobster: alright Mr science, here's what ya gonna do see, you're gonna give us that mechanical monstrosity and make him turn into gold, or you'll be eating a dinner o lead with the fishes.
Panel3: rectangle panel in the middle of the page.
Action: we see the scientist angry wiping blood from his mouth while in the foreground we see the silhouette of the mobster standing over him.
Scientist: I will not buckle my morals to some poorly dressed racketeers and their miniscule muscles.
Panel4: square panel.
Mobster: why I'll show you.
Action: The mobster shoots his gun at the doctor with a bang.
Panel5: square panel.
Action: a blur of color is seen emerging from seemingly nowhere and appearing in between the doctor and the mobster.
Panel6: square panel.
Action: and to the shock and surprise of the mobster the man he just tried to shoot is not hurt in any way.
Mobster: what the.
Panel7: thin rectangular panel.
Action: the mobsters eyes as they look irritated and atto stands behind and to the side from him holding a bullet inspecting it.
Atto: discharging a weapon at an elderly man for some vain attempt of monetary gain through a sentient miracle of science, clearly you have egos the size of Texas, that or you have brains the size of atoms.
Pg8
Panel1: rectangular panel.
Action: clearly insulted by what the artificial man is saying, the head mobster turns around pointing his gun at the robot.
Mobster: all right then Mr wise guy, rattle him boys.
Panel2: another rectangle but thicker than the last one.
Action: The two other mobsters point their tommy guns at atto who stands in the middle between both of them and the head mobster and they all begin shooting.
Panel3: large square bottom left.
Action: moving in a blur Atto is able to grab every single bullet out of the air making after projections of his arms as he goes and seemingly makes the bullets disappear.
Panel4: large square bottom right.
Action: the mobsters seeing this are shocked and frightened.
Mobster: alright boys, clearly this isn't our day, let's scram.
Pg9
Panel1-4: three square panels at the top and a rectangle underneath.
Action: The mobsters try running away but fall and after looking at their feet discover with shock and horror that their shoes are now solid lead blocks around their feet.
Mobster: cripes, how is this possible?
Panel5-7: square panels.
Action: we see atto's head in a caption box on the top of the first panel showing from a different angle atto grabbing the bullets as he's shot at, then the next panel shows him with one bullet walking over to the head mobster, then we see atto mold the bullet like clay onto the mobsters shoed foot.
Atto: while you were shooting at me so recklessly, I grabbed every bullet you guys shot and without you even noticing it, i began forming each bullet you shot at me into shoes of lead around your feet, how? well by using my incredible abilities of speed and power over matter of course.
Panel8: big bottom rectangle with a caption box on the bottom right hand side.
Action: we see atto standing in the typical hero pose, hands on his hips as his scientist father and creator congratulates him.
Scientist: You did good my son, this was truly a remarkable test of your incredible abilities and wit, I'll call the police to take care of these ruffians.
Caption: and triumphantly the day is saved by the artificial man ATTO, but where will our young hero go next, what's his next step as America's newest man of mystery and super powered hero, come back in the next issue of MULTI-TEAM COMICS to find out.
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| Here's a sketch I made of how I imagine Atto looking like, I used two golden age Comics to trace over to create this Specifically a depiction of the hero Cyclone from issue #2 of whirlwind comics And The lower half is from a story Involving the hero blackout, I don't know What issue this one comes from do to How I archived it but he appears in The Holyoke comics line Catman Comics All of which can be found on comic book Plus, also his design is a mix of the Two mentioned superheroes plus some Inspiration from Volton, the wizard of speed And time and even iron man |
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